The one and only – 25 (downtown mmmm) (MSF)
hello craiglisters
Im Angel, the one and only true gentleman left in brooklyn. well here is a little bit of myself, im 6′2” tall latino of puerto rican decent also a west indian boy of trinidadian decent. I enjoy being out doors in the rain,snow, and or shinn. i love music(bachata salsa, merengea, house,techno, trance and some rock. i dont smoke i drink for special events birthdays, weddings etc. i love to drive i love to fix cars and my boys cars also families to. im family oriented very close to grannys. i like going to movies comedy shows and maury show its so kool. i go dancing most days im off. i just started the whole traveling seeing thing i havent been out of usa but just getting my training wheel been to florida cali mexico city nevada dc boston maryland and jersey baby step. i have tattoos, which means i express myself as best as i can always being brutally honest.
you short 5′-5′8” tall
long hair if you have short hair its gotta be stylish
weight no problem here
race dont care everyone is beautiful
kid/s ok just not old enough to correct
drinks ok
please no smoking
animals a pluse
own car is kool(got my own)
INDEPENDENT
This guy obvioulsy has good intentions but needs help.
The photo is the first problem. On Craigslist there’s no ‘primary’ photo but the first photo you post is going to send a message. This one breaks the cardinal rule – keep your shirt on. For a gentleman who doesn’t appear to live in the gym this photo’s not a draw.
The second obvious problem is the writing. No capitals and poor grammar are fine if you’re writing a note pleading for rescue, with a stick, in your own blood. Otherwise, write to be read. Some people defend this ’style’ by implying they’re cool, relaxed people looking for the same. It doesn’t fly. Reading alphabet mess is hard work. There’s nothing easier to read than a short well crafted sentence. Most people will give up when the going’s this hard.
As he’s 6′2″ tall why refuse to even hear from women over 5′8″. Would he really turn down a date with Gisele? Asking for “stylish” hair is fine, but who doesn’t think their hair’s okay? If a question that won’t produce useful answers, ditch it. The stuff about weight, race and animals is positive and sweet, good job. Unfortunately the comment about kids is weird.
Suggested improvements:
Spell check. Grammar check. Punctuate.
Kill, or clarify the comment about children (what does ‘correct’ imply?) Re-consider some of the weirdness, “…Close to grannys…” is more than a little eccentric?
It may also help to find photos which don’t have Dora the Explorer stickers stuck on the wall behind you. Just a thought.
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